#Flashfictionchallenge – Mouse

Charli Mills’ flash fiction challenge for March 7, 2019 is as follows: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a mouse. It can be real, imagined, electronic or whiskered. Go where the prompt leads! You can join in here: https://carrotranch.com/2019/03/08/march-7-flash-fiction-challenge/

I am currently listening to the audio book of Bram Stoker’s Dracula. You might wonder what Dracula has to do with a mouse so I will explain the link. Dracula is written entirely as a collection of diary and journal entries and letters to the various characters. I thought it might be fun to write this 99-word prompt as a diary entry, so that is what I have done:

Yesterday morning I saw a mouse dash across the kitchen floor and slip under the dishwasher. We live near a bird sanctuary so we do get the odd furry visitor. My husband catches mice using a method involving rat glue smeared on a piece of cardboard. I hate it but we cannot have mice taking up permanent residence in our home.

The gluey cardboard worked and this morning I found the mouse stuck to the cardboard. It was still alive and had to be drowned in water. That is the down side of rat glue – it doesn’t kill quickly.


64 thoughts on “#Flashfictionchallenge – Mouse

  1. In fiction or real life, it’s harsh, but we can’t have mice in our homes. We went through that last year. By the way, the pest guy told us to stuff steel wool in all the nooks and crannies that lead to the house. It has been very effective.

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  2. I also shared a story on the Carrot Ranch site, and like yours, mine was based on reality, although not a diary entry…I shared a story of how my Mom captured a mouse at our house once…like yours, not eligible for “rehabilitation”

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  3. Oh no, I wouldn’t know what to do if I saw a mouse glued on a cardboard. I wouldn’t be the one who drown the mouse. My husband uses mouse trap and mild poison. If the mouse ate the poison and died some where on the slop in our backyard, I wouldn’t see it. He used an infrared camera and took pictures and a mouse was caught on camera several nights ago.

    Yours is a great story though, Robbie!

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      1. I think I know what it is like. We have a shed in the backyard where we store things. The rat went into a box of my books, and got trapped. He was roasted because the shed is hot in the summer. We usually don’t have rats indoor because of the way most houses are built.

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  4. I hope you are enjoying Dracula, Robbie. I used to see mice in the garden where I lived before, but there were so many cats around I think they kept them in check (or perhaps they didn’t fancy the food in my house). I always wondered about those sonic things you plugged and supposedly scared pests off, but they sure don’t work for mosquitoes. No good method, it seems.

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    1. Poison works, Olga, but it also kills the owls and the other rodent eating birds. We live near a bird sanctuary and I like birds. I am less fond of mice and rats so the rat glue comes into action to let the birds live.


      1. Your breadth of creativity is amazing, Robbie. You spread your wings wide! I can see you mastering this style for a modern horror tale. It’s almost like telling a joke with a straight face. The narrator remains innocent to the horror the reader has building!

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      2. Thank you, Charli. My mom loves Through the Nethergate which I am still editing and improving thanks to Esther’s great feedback. She wants me to write a sequel. I explained to her that I don’t think I can write sequels. I fall in love with an idea and characters and write about them. When it is done and the story told, I lose interest and find my passion elsewhere. I can’t write just for the sake of it.


  5. this is what I use Robbie. Except I use a wooden dowel and two one litre plastic pop bottles. I cut the bottles in half and only use the two pouring ends. I fit them both together with the open ends at either end. Of course I put the peanut butter in the middle and use to ramps at both ends. Smear some peanut butter on the ramps to help lure but make sure to wash your hands first to eliminate your scent.

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  6. We get roof rats in autumn, so I know what you go through. I hate to see the silly things suffer, my hubby cornered one in our washer so he turned it on and sent little rat into eternity. Cool inspiration and your journal style was heartfelt and realistic, Robbie!

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